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好快咁睇咗一次page 1個draft, 我想提議以下修改, 好多都唔係error, 不過我覺得咁樣外國人睇起嚟會覺得自然D...

Dear New York Times Readers,

We are a group of concerned citizens who have been were among the two million protesters marching on the who filled the streets of Hong Kong. This is our sincere quest plea for your help to defend our autonomy and freedoms. Here is why you should care.

China has been relentlessly extending imposing their flawed authoritarian rule into on Hong Kong since 1997. A recent example is the HKSAR Hong Kong Government’s proposed "Extradition Bill" that would allow the extradition of alleged “fugitives” from Hong Kong to China, a country that is notorious for its disrespect disregard for the rule of law, and whose judicial system has a conviction rate of 99.9%.

Businessmen, journalists, tourists of all nations, and even ordinary Hong Kongers citizens could be subject to arrests and sent to China for trials of alleged crimes and fabricated accusations. This will have a devastating impact on Hong Kong where global businesses reside, on the freedom of speech and religion, and on human rights – universal rights that each and every single one of us should enjoy is entitled to.

This That is why two million of us took to the streets defiantly, even after unjustifiable violent suppression from by the police on against peaceful and unarmed protestors who are then stigmatized by the government as “rioters”. Police acted brutally by beating protestors young and old withusing batons and firing 150 tear gas canisters at large crowds, by aiming rubber bullets and bean bag rounds at our heads. But we are determined to defend human our last bits of inherent rights and our autonomy.

Withdrawal of the Extradition Bill should only be the beginning. We request demand the unconditional release of all the arrested, the retracting of the “riot” designation of June 12 incident, and the conducting of an independent commission of inquiry to look into police brutality. But Most importantly, we demand universal suffrage which allows Hong Kongers to choose our own leaders and make them accountable for their actions. Please join Hong Kong in defending upholding liberty and human rights against authoritarianism.

In view of the upcoming G20 Summit and the meeting between Presidents Trump and Xi, we implore you to deliver address our concerns and demands to your governments. We urge you to stand with us in preserving Hong Kong’s freedom and autonomy against China’s oppression.

Thank you.

Yours truly,
Hong Kongers

支持

如果要topic sentence, 一句Hong Kong Needs Your Help, 之後先開新段千字文得唔得?

我有個問題呀
以我認知Hongkonger應該係一個字？
http://news.stheadline.com/dailynews/headline_news_detail_columnist.asp?id=279287&section_name=wtt&kw=28
定其實咁拆開 等人易明d？
Sor for 唔係好識英文

咁我又冇乜研究, 頭先都冇諗過執, 不過我見wikipedia 係一個字

其實下款加埋"香港人"三隻字仲型

好似訓左覺...

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