【眾籌】我地出咗final draft啦！！！！

真係要叫人加入抗爭, 戰鬥,
用詞激昂先吸引到人睇

急推

都可以 睇睇邊句多人BUY

如果唔夠錢出聲，等捐款

plea...

可否嘗試apply落呢一份稿上?

Hongkongers shall never surrender

The totalitarian government of China manifests its evilness in the proposal of the Extradition Law in Hong Kong, a law that not only destroys the autonomy of Hong Kong, but also endangers the safety of all foreigners who chance to travel or stay in this land of freedom. The government refused to listen to the voice of 2 million of protesters, and they even sent the Hong Kong Police Force to terrorize the people.

We are lovers of freedom living in Hong Kong, a place that has fallen into the dark hand of totalitarianism since 1997. Still we have never once forgotten the true worth of freedom, democracy and human rights. They never succeeded in convincing us otherwise.

We will stand firm to fight for our autonomy. We will stand firm to fight for our democracy. And we will resist totalitarianism in the name of freedom. Hongkongers shall never surrender.

The proposal of the Extradition Law must be completely withdrawn, and in addition, the autonomy of Hong Kong must be guaranteed with the introduction of Universal Suffrage in the election of the Legislative Council and thereafter the Chief Executive. Join us in the fight against totalitarianism by delivering our concerns and demands to your governments in view of the upcoming G20 summit.

#LiberateHK #weshallneversurrender

其實話就話FINALIZED咗

有冇得再同NYT 傾下
轉一次啦....
雖然明白咁趕係辛苦, 但真係要改下啲字眼...

推

Same here

推比樓主睇

有嘢改！！！(from Reddit)

搵黎望望先。。。。

辛苦晒有份出力嘅巴打

1, original: We are a group of concerned citizens who have been among the two million protesters marching *on the streets of Hong Kong*.
Suggested: *on the streets in Hong Kong*

2, original: This is our sincere plea for your help to defend our sovereignty *and freedoms*.

Suggestions: “,freedoms and human rights.”

3, original: *Bankers, businessmen, tourists, and even ordinary Hongkongers* could be arrested and sent to China for trials of alleged crimes and fabricated accusations.

Suggestions: *Anyone, including bankers, businessmen, tourists ...*

4, Original: This is why *two million* of us took to the streets.

Suggestions: two-million or two millions

5, .original: We urge you to stand with us in preserving Hong Kong’s freedom and autonomy *under Chinese rule*

Suggestion: under basic law

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