【眾籌】我地出咗final draft啦！！！！

佢都比左好多時間大家幫手比意見
然後都間唔時有寫日上水回應
Finalise 應該有變

其實無圖或者一個大標題真係好唔eye catching...

I shall 和 I will
我們很多時把shall和will混淆。何時說I shall，何時說I will？現代英文的shall和will用法，和一百年前的英文分別很大。基本上，現在只有We和I會跟shall，he、she、they不會跟shall。至於will，若用於I will，那意思是「我情願」、「我相信我會做」。I will see you.是說我相信我會來見你，這是我的意願。I shall die one day.就用shall，因為那沒甚麼意願可言，是定律。小童說I shall go to school tomorrow.這也不是他可以選擇的，沒意願可言，所以用shall。要認真地講究shall和will的分別，可以很複雜，但大致的分別就是這樣。

from 楊鐵樑

辛苦晒

Surrender 其實唔太好，因爲我地唔可以將China 認定為我地敵人， surrender 喺呢個context 會令人覺得我地搞獨立，打緊仗
Erm... 我地既主題係 保護我地應有既自由民主，我地要外國知道我地好緊張呢樣嘢
我地唔係搞對抗，唔係打仗。


HONG KONGERS STAND TO DEFEND THEIR RIGHTS AND FREEDOM
可以再簡化d 請求高見

辛苦哂

原意都係咁

再執咗D, 最後一段好難寫求意見

Hongkongers shall never surrender

The totalitarian government of China manifests its evilness in the proposal of the Extradition Law in Hong Kong, a law that not only destroys the autonomy of Hong Kong, but also endangers the safety of all foreigners who chance to travel or stay in this land of freedom. The government refused to listen to the voice of 2 million of protesters, and they even sent the Hong Kong Police Force to terrorize the people.

We are lovers of freedom living in Hong Kong which has fallen into the dark hand of totalitarianism since 1997. Still we have never once forgotten the true worth of freedom, democracy and human rights. They never succeeded in convincing us otherwise.

We will stand firm to fight for our autonomy. We will stand firm to fight for our democracy. And we will resist totalitarianism in the name of freedom. Hongkongers shall never surrender.

The proposal of the Extradition Law must be completely withdrawn, and in addition, the autonomy of Hong Kong must be guaranteed with the introduction of Universal Suffrage in the election of the Legislative Council and thereafter the Chief Executive. Join us in the fight against totalitarianism by delivering our concerns and demands to your governments in view of the upcoming G20 summit.

#LiberateHK #weshallneversurrender

既然定咗案就支持下算啦, 或者開個集中改進post, 再提無意思.
辛苦晒文宣

其實中間有link叫人幫手入去寫

推

一定要贏!

200+1固然重要 但而家要引起國際話題
要等佢地睇完知 佢地除左關注 仲可以做啲咩

Push

not sure if it's wise to add sth specific like a time frame to highlight the urgency

想補充返
三黎 （哩個係咪太古個烈士如果係其實好有象徵性 ）
同埋義士有血有肉vs黑警冷血無情嘅對比

我嘅諗法係加強語氣
第一句係邱吉爾名句冇得改
用佢個pattern重複

可以試下用呢句

不過改唔到就真係下份改啦 大家都係想件事好

大家加油

either way, we will win

當然要再修改下d字啦