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last para quite good

我都想知 可以整合意見俾佢地

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向攬抄同眾籌團隊致敬

其實張圖唔係好睇唔到太古義士

NO
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用高抄200萬人既相會唔會好d？

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文筆好好

其實你地睇下google.docs先

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Hi 多謝樓主 😎😎 Can I give a suggestion to this sentence: ”We urge our government to agree to our three demands.”

I would suggest the below amendment:

“We urge our government to agree to HongKongers three reasonable requests:”

As the words “demands” has significant links to people who take things hostage, I believe it would be more appropriate to use the word “requests”, which accurately reflect the means by which we are asking the government to handle those 3 items. If we are trying to gain sympathy from the word, we need to maintain the spirit of cordial dialogue in the discussion.

呢個只係小小建議 希望幫到手🙇🏻‍♀️🙇🏻‍♀️🙇🏻‍♀️

perfect！
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2. 排版問題

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