【眾籌】我地出咗final draft啦！！！！

家樂牌通心粉 · 2019-06-25T20:07:44+08:00

感謝各個連登仔女，各界人士大力支持及相助！！最後我地條team同我要攬炒巴團隊一齊改好以下呢個draft， 6月28日嘅New York Times有全頁ad，到時見！！！（好多外國報紙唔會做頭版，我地盡咗力。但係我地而家都繼續同其他報紙有聯絡，日、英、澳、法、德、台都有努力準備緊，希望有好消息！唔好意思因為一直好忙所以無覆大家留言，但係我地有巴絲有留意住架！感謝大家！！！） _________________________________________________________________________ Dear New York Times Readers, We are a group of concerned citizens who have been among the two million protesters marching on the streets of Hong Kong. This is our sincere plea for your help to defend our sovereignty and freedoms. Here is why you should care. In 2019, the Hong Kong SAR Government proposed a bill that would allow the extradition of alleged “fugitives” from Hong Kong to China, a country that is notorious for its disrespect for the rule of law. The judicial system in China has a conviction rate of 99.9%, and prisoners are known to have suffered from severe violations of human rights. Bankers, businessmen, tourists, and even ordinary Hongkongers could be arrested and sent to China for trials of alleged crimes and fabricated accusations. Hong Kong will cease to be a free economic zone, which has long served the world’s most prominent businesses. This is why two million of us took to the streets. We were unarmed. We had only helmets, umbrellas and plastic wrap. In return, the police suppressed us by unleashing 150 tear gas canisters shot in close range, aiming batons at our heads, and firing rubber bullets and bean bag rounds. Numerous peaceful protesters were unjustifiably arrested, interrogated, and stigmatized as “rioters". Hong Kong’s Chief Executive Carrie Lam has announced a suspension of the Extradition Bill which is NOT equivalent to withdrawal. We urge our government to agree to our three demands: 1. To completely withdraw the Extradition Bill. 2. To release all the arrested unconditionally and undertake not to prosecute any of the protestors. 3. To appoint an independent commission of inquiry to look into incidents of police brutality. In view of the upcoming G20 summit and the meeting between Trump and Xi, we implore you to deliver our concerns and demands to your governments. We urge you to stand with us in preserving Hong Kong’s freedom and autonomy under Chinese rule. Thank you. Yours truly, Hongkongers

淡定淡定 2019-06-25 21:36:20

加油加油

淡定淡定

關你叉燒 2019-06-25 21:36:22

last para quite good

㷫過火雞 2019-06-25 21:36:35

我都想知可以整合意見俾佢地

浦東之星 2019-06-25 21:36:37

推

懦夫的救星 2019-06-25 21:36:37

你老母月娥 2019-06-25 21:36:39

Push!

番梘泡 2019-06-25 21:36:44

推

電火 2019-06-25 21:36:46

撚雀和理非 2019-06-25 21:36:54

向攬抄同眾籌團隊致敬

Fghfgjj 2019-06-25 21:36:55

其實張圖唔係好睇唔到太古義士

汪汪真鳩喂 2019-06-25 21:37:03

NO
a唔alone唔係你話事

倔強柴犬 2019-06-25 21:37:25

推

海眠害害 2019-06-25 21:37:29

用高抄200萬人既相會唔會好d？

㷫過火雞 2019-06-25 21:37:34

麻煩幫手反映意見
辛苦大家

Freedom-cunt 2019-06-25 21:37:35

文筆好好

那裡只有我和妳 2019-06-25 21:37:52

其實你地睇下google.docs先

服務由頭版編輯秘書處提供，盡量及時update
自發做野有料有成果想Report既可以TG: shameonhkpolice 做分流聯絡
英文稿、日文稿已finalized

番梘泡 2019-06-25 21:37:58

推

Yo是撐撐 2019-06-25 21:38:09

Hi 多謝樓主 😎😎 Can I give a suggestion to this sentence: ”We urge our government to agree to our three demands.”

I would suggest the below amendment:

“We urge our government to agree to HongKongers three reasonable requests:”

As the words “demands” has significant links to people who take things hostage, I believe it would be more appropriate to use the word “requests”, which accurately reflect the means by which we are asking the government to handle those 3 items. If we are trying to gain sympathy from the word, we need to maintain the spirit of cordial dialogue in the discussion.

呢個只係小小建議希望幫到手🙇🏻‍♀️🙇🏻‍♀️🙇🏻‍♀️

港女的呼籲 2019-06-25 21:38:11

perfect！
最後加返句提下點解我地呢件事會關美國事

We all live in a global village and we need your help!!!

醜婦終須信天翁 2019-06-25 21:38:12

兩大問題！！！
1. 要強硬啲
2. 排版問題

世界係咁嫁啦 2019-06-25 21:38:16

下款唔好叫HongKonger? 咁樣代表香港所有人，未必個個鐘意

K2-155d 2019-06-25 21:38:17

推呢個

其實個scope可以大返少少,
引導世人望向支那極權下的西藏、新疆, 同香港消失的universal suffrage.

【眾籌】我地出咗final draft啦！！！！

家樂牌通心粉