陪我溫IELTS

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你有冇多一兩篇之前寫落嘅文俾我睇睇？

作左篇文 Writing Task 1

You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,
· say what the problem is
· describe the accommodation you thought you were getting
· ask the provider to solve the problem



Dear Mr. White,

I am Peter Parker. and I have enrolled in the summer course of "ABC" college to study English. I am living in a share house ,/ that was arranged by the school. The location is close to the campus. It helps me save traveling time and focus on study but a quiet environment is also very important to study, which the current accommodation cannot provide. I am writing to complain about ...

I am living with 3 other students. As they are having a summer break of their study., It seems that they are in a holiday mood. They camecome back very late and mademake a lot of noise. They haveeven held overnight parties several times. I have been wakewoken up by them inat the mid-night frequently. and My rest havehas been interrupted, so has my study.

It is a big contrast to my expectation which was a quiet environment with dedicated students. That would benefit my study and experiences.

I am wondering if your could arrange meanother apartment for me to live with my coursemates who share the same schedule and goals.

I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,
Peter Parker

* "I am living" = I am sharing/ I share the apartment = synonym/ paraphrase
* My rest (= it = third person singular) My rest has been interrupted.
* so has my study = my study has been interrupted.
* As..., .... NOT As they are having a summer break of their study.
* You can use present continuous tense to complain about something that happens frequently. E.g. They are always arguing.
* describe the accommodation you thought you were getting - Although you have mentioned it in your third paragraph, it is rather weak in terms of task achievement.

Suggestion:
+ how to paraphrase.
+ use more complex sentence structures.
+ how to paragraph your letter
+ Subject verb agreement

唔知General個standard係咩 9up下

唔知General個standard係咩 9up下

唔知呢個啱唔啱洗

http://www.examenglish.com/IELTS/IELTS_Writing_MarkSchemes.html

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巴打睇下呢條link幫唔幫倒你啦
有咩問題可以拎出嚟討論下

www2.elc.polyu.edu.hk/cill/eiw/complaint_letter_constructor.htm

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.
Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,
· introduce yourself
· explain what experience and special skills you have
· explain why you are interested in the job


Dear Sir/Madam,

Further to your recent advertisement for the position of sales representative of the City Museum shop on ABC newspaper dated 20th February 2017. I am writing to apply for the vacancy and enclose my resume for your consideration.

I am Peter. I am studying Marketing in Hong Kong University.

Apart from my study, I was a student ambassador. Other locals students and I guided international students to adapt to the local society by introducing the local culture and transport. For instances, we led them to buy the monthly tickets for the train and had dinners in local restaurants. My language skill and communication skill were hugely improved.

I am confident to deliver the best service to the customers in your shop with those skills.

I enjoyed the interaction with people especially foreign tourists. I would like to have the opportunity to practice my English and meet different people again.

My term finishes on 25th February until 30th March. I am available in the whole period.

I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully.
Peter Parker

你都咁勁 點同你溫

你都咁勁 點同你溫

勁就唔洗溫啦

唔知General個standard係咩 9up下

唔知呢個啱唔啱洗

http://www.examenglish.com/IELTS/IELTS_Writing_MarkSchemes.html

返去睇下先

唔知General個standard係咩 9up下

咁勁

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.
Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,
· introduce yourself
· explain what experience and special skills you have
· explain why you are interested in the job


Dear Sir/Madam,

Further to your recent advertisement for the position of sales representative of the City Museum shop on in ABC newspaper dated 20th February 2017. I am writing to apply for the position of sales representative in the City Museum shop which was advertised in the ABC newspaper on 20th February 2017.vacancy and enclose my resume for your consideration.

(My name is)I am Peter. and I am currentlystudying for a (Bachelor/Master/PhD)in Marketing in at Hong Kong University.

I am an outgoing and challenge-seeking person.Apart from my study, I took the initiative to becomewas a student ambassadorof the university. My role and responsibilities are assisting foreign/international students in adapting a new culture...understanding the history of Hong Kong... show them around... Other locals students and I guided international students to adapt to the local society by introducing the local culture and transport. For instances, we led them to buy the monthly tickets for the train and had dinners in local restaurants(會唔會講去邊度景點玩下會比較好). My language skills and communications skill were are (further)hugely improved enhanced.

I am confident to deliver the best service to the customers in your shop with those skills.

I enjoyed(past tense? 之前enjoy 宜家唔enjoy?) interacting the interaction with differentpeople, especially foreign tourists. I would like to have the opportunity to practice my English and meet different people again.


With my aforesaid background and skills, I am confident that I would be a capable and professional...........

My availability starts fromterm finishes on 25th February until 30th March. I am available in the whole period.

Enclosed please find my resume for your reference. Should you require any further information, please don't hesitate to reach me by email/phone. Thank you for your kind consideration in advance and
I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully.
Peter Parker

睇下會唔會好一點
文章結構有改善空間

上兩個月裸考overall 7留名
香港人要靠reading listening 拉嫁啦
Writing speaking 唔好睇得自己咁高

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睇下會唔會好一點
文章結構有改善空間[/quote]
今晚消化下

上兩個月裸考overall 7留名
香港人要靠reading listening 拉嫁啦
Writing speaking 唔好睇得自己咁高

依家考IELTS 講overall 冇咩意思

上兩個月裸考overall 7留名
香港人要靠reading listening 拉嫁啦
Writing speaking 唔好睇得自己咁高

依家考IELTS 講overall 冇咩意思

我overall 同細分滿足到我報既野咪得囉

上兩個月裸考overall 7留名
香港人要靠reading listening 拉嫁啦
Writing speaking 唔好睇得自己咁高

依家考IELTS 講overall 冇咩意思

我overall 同細分滿足到我報既野咪得囉

又係wor

Writing

* 60分鐘
* Task 1
- 至少150字
- 問題種類: line graph, bar chart, pie chart, table, map, process/ flow charter


有啲譯得唔係咁好，但highlight咗重點
* 文章完成度 Task Achievement
- 能夠正確地按照指示
- 能夠寫到明確同相關既描述
- 集中係圖表上既重要趨勢

9分:
- 完全滿足到問題既要求
- 明確、詳盡回應問題
8分:
- 涵蓋哂問題既要求
- 清晰地表達、突顯同顯示重點
7分:
- 涵蓋問題既要求
- 清晰咁表達到主要趨勢、差異或階段既概述
- 清晰咁表達同突顯到重點，但需要更充分既說明
6分:
- 處理到問題既要求
- 概述 係有適當地選擇寫咩落去
- 表達同充分咁突顯到重點，但細節位可能唔相關、唔適當或者唔正確

* Coherence字句連貫 & Cohesion 語意連貫
- 用適當既結構寫出文章
- 有邏輯地用連接詞去連接句子同段落

9分:
- 通順
- 有技巧地處理段落
8分:
- 有系統同邏輯地提出論點
- 連貫性處理得好
- 適當地用段落
7分:
- 有邏輯地組織論點
- 有清晰咁循序漸進
- 適當地用連接詞/指標詞，但有出現過量/過少既情況
6分:
- 連貫地編排想法同有清晰咁循序漸進
- 有效咁用連接詞，但句子間會出現唔正確既連貫詞。
- Referencing唔夠清晰或唔適當

* 詞彙 Lexical Resource
- 自然及廣泛地用詞彙
- 正確串字同用適當既詞型

9分:
- 自然及廣泛地運用詞彙
- 小錯誤係罕見
8分:
- 流暢同靈活地用廣泛既詞彙[gold]去表達精確既意思
- 有技巧地[gold]用唔常見既字，但偶爾會有唔正確既選字或搭配
- 串錯字同用錯詞型(例:名詞->動詞)係罕見
7分:
- 足夠既詞彙
- 用唔常見既詞，注意到有意識地處理風格同搭配
- 間中有錯既選字、串錯或用錯詞型
6分:
- 充足既詞彙
- 嘗試用唔常見既詞彙，但唔正確
- 串錯字或用錯詞型，但唔大影響

* 文法準確性 Grammatical Range & Accuracy
- 適當同正確既文法
- 使用不同句子結構

9分:
- 靈活同準確地用廣泛既結構
- 小錯誤係罕見
8分:
- 用廣泛既結構
- 大部分既句子係無錯誤
- 偶爾有錯或唔正確既用法
7分:
- 有各樣既結構
- 句子經常都係無錯
- 文法同標點符號都掌握得好好，但會有少錯
6分:
- 有混合咁用simple同complex句子
- 文法同標點符號都會有錯，但唔大影響


* Task 2
- 至少250字
- Task 2既分係Task 1既兩倍
- 申論題
- 提出同辯解意見
- 辯論
- 評估同挑戰想法、證據同論證
- 討論主題: 問題會提出意見或論點
- 討論議題需要兩至三個論點，再舉證

Task Achievement
- 提一個有邏輯既明確立場，有充分既論點
- 用自身經歷同理由去支持你既論點
- 集中係主題/問題，唔好離題

9分:
- 完全滿足到問題要求
- 提出充分既立場去回答問題，提出相關、非常詳細同非常充分既想法
8分:
- 充分滿足到問題要求
- 回應係相關、詳細同充分既想法
7分:
- 答到問題既要求
- 清晰既立場
- 表達出主意，有詳細同論述，但會過份摡括或者論點無焦點
6分:
- 答到問題，但有啲地方會有更充分討論
- 相關既立場，但總結唔清晰、重覆
- 相關既主意，但唔清晰或唔夠充分

Coherence & Cohesion
9分: 同上
8分: 同上
7分: 同上
- 每段都有清晰既主句
6分: 同上

Lexical Resource
9分: 同上
8分: 同上
7分: 同上
6分: 同上

Grammatical Range & Accuracy
9分: 同上
8分: 同上
7分: 同上
- 用不同既複雜句子結構
6分: 同上

Task 1:

- 通常有太多資料，所以集中係重點同明顯既趨勢
- 時態 (靜態定隨時間改變?)
- 多變化既詞彙、用同義詞
- 例: jobs -> occupations, types of employment/work
- 唔好將問題搬問題搬字過紙
- 唔洗俾自己意見，只需要睇到咩就寫咩
- 總體趨勢，包含數字 (無寫數字或太多數字，得5分)

1. 圖表題
文章結構:

Introduction
- 描述題目 (重點: 要換下啲字)
- 描述總體趨勢

Body
- 仔細描述 (需要數據支持)
- 最多、第二最多、最少同不規則

Conclusion
- 總結


2. Process/ flow chart
- 明白重要既階段
- 需要寫全部既階段
- 留意同時間發生既步驟
- 需要用連接詞去表達順序

文章結構:
Introduction
概述整體既功能

Body
有邏輯地形容過程


3. Object/ how something works
- 明白件物件如何運作
- 集中係重要特徵

Structure:
Introduction
簡單描述物件既結構同作用

Body:
一步一步形容運作

4. Map



Task2:
- 間低重點
- 睇清楚題目，答案要寫咩
- 無咩焦點，太概括
- 善用連接詞 可得7分

Planning:
- 論點 + 個人經歷
- 選擇論點同主題句
- 每個論點既論據

論文陳述 (Thesis statement):
例: In this essay, I will examine both sides of the issue in detail, before stating why I believe this is a negative development.
The essay will...
In this essay, I will

總結:
- 重述意見
- 總結要結


問題類別
1. 意見 (同意/不同意)
- What is your opinion?
- Do you agree or disagree?
- To what extend do you agree or disagree?
- Direct question

Introduction:
重新描述問題
Thesis statement
大綱 - 你將會講既重點

Body 1:
主題句
解釋
再解釋

Body 2

Conclusion:
總結

2. 優點同缺點
- Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.
- Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinions.

Introduction:
重新描述問題
大綱

Body 1:
優點
解釋
例子
結果

Body 2

Conclusion:
總結/概要
意見

3. 問題同解決方案
- Problem and solution
- Cause and solution

Introduction:
重新描述問題
大綱

Body 1:
問題
解釋
結果
例子

Body 2

Conclusion:
總結
提議/ 預測結果 (需小心)


4. 討論
- statement

Introduction:
重新描述問題 + 兩方觀點
Thesis statement
大綱

Body 1:
第一觀點
討論
同意或不同意既原因
例子去支持你既觀點

Body 2
例: Another reason for the decline in academic standard is... (NOT another reason is ...)

Conclusion:
總結
說明邊一個觀點較重要

5. 2條問題
- statement + 2 questions

Introduction:
重新描述背景
概述兩條問題

Body 1:
直接回答第一條問題
解釋
再解釋
例子

Body 2
直接回答第二條問題
解釋
再解釋
例子

Conclusion:
總結

If people are not laughing at your goals,
your goals are too small.

共勉之

參考左大家意見，改左第一篇


Dear Mr. White,

I am Peter Parker and I have enrolled in the summer course of "ABC" college to study English. I am writing to complain about the accommodation provided by the school and to request a rearrangement.

I am living with 3 other students. As they are having a summer break of their study, it seems that they are in a holiday mood. They come back very late and make a lot of noise. I have been woken up by them at the mid-night frequently and my rest has been interrupted, so has my study.

I cannot focus in the classes due to insufficient sleep, especially in morning lessons. That results in my poor performance in quizzes.

It is a big contrast to my expectation that I was anticipating students who were respectful, helpful and hard-working. As such, we could discuss the lesson content, assist each other and get enough rest.

I am wondering if you could arrange another apartment for me to live with my coursemates who share the same schedule and goals. Therefore, we can minimize the disturbance of rest and study together after lesson.

I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,
Peter Parker

If people are not laughing at your goals,
your goals are too small.

共勉之

7仔留明

好緊張 星期六考
又失眠又剩
Reading好唔穩定 heading 6題錯4題
做極都係咁
Writing就淨係睇過背過下少少structure
本身想靠reading listening拉分 molamola