睇左個post一陣,手痕幫佢重新寫左一次
求學術討論
sir/Madam,
I, Debbie Ho, am a Year 2 student of the Department of Government and Public Administration. I am writing this letter to ask for your sponsorship so that I can join the “Harvard Project for Asian and International Relations”.
Just days ago, I was notified that I have been invited to join the “Harvard Project for Asian and International Relations”, an international event that is being held by Harvard University in Sydney between the 17th to the 21st of August, 2017. You might be familiar with this event since our campus was the venue for the same event last year.
Although it is a privilege to be able to attend such a distinctive event, I can’t afford to go since all of the trip fees are self-reliance. Because of that, I am sincerely asking you to sponsor and support me financially so that I can join this meaningful event. I can’t offer much in return, but if you are interested, please kindly contact me via email or phone (xxxxxxxx). Thank you for considering my request.
Attached is the confirming letter and the link to the event’s website.
Sincerely,
Debbie Ho
利申dse英文攞3
你英文水平同Debbie ho差唔多
求指教
整體文筆有d clumsy
Between xx "and" xx 唔係 to。一係就唔要between 咁你就可以寫 xx to xx
Self-reliance 係佢本身其中一個明顯既mistake. 呢個係noun, 可以勉強改做all fees are on self-reliance basis
個人寫呢d信唔會同can't, 會用cannot. 同can't 就好似isn't weren't 咁太casual
唔寫咁多 我都唔係叻 n年前會考5*而已